The roman empire was one of if not the greatest empire of all time. It had conquered almost all of the know world back during its time. However soon the empire started to do very badly. The roman empire experience many problems and fell. Another commonly debate theory, however, is that the roman empire did not fall but just transformed into something else.
The great Roman empire had slowly started to decline. "This slow decline occurred over a period of approximately 320 years, culminating on September 4, 476, when Romulus Augustus, the last Emperor of the Western Roman Empire, was deposed by Odoacer, a Germanic chieftain. " (Wikipedia). This shows that the empire did slowly fall. It considers the main point of its collapse was the roman emperor Romulus Augustus was killed by a Germanic chief. This was considered the final collapsing point for the roman empire. They could never recover after that loss.
The Roman empire fell due to many different factors. "There are adherents to single factors, but more people think a combination of such factors as Christianity, decadence, lead, monetary trouble, and military problems caused the Fall of Rome" (Gill, N.S.). This means that the empire fell due to a lot of small things put together. Such small problems such as these together completely undermined the Roman Empire. Especially their military problems since they could no longer defend themselves. There was no way they could defend all of their territories when they had little military power and whatever they conquered just got retaken over.
The main reason the Roman Empire fell were, "military overreach, invasion by emboldened tribes of Huns and Visigoths from northern and central Europe, inflation, corruption and political incompetence." (Squires, Nick). This explains how another contributing factor to the fall was political incompetence. The romans were unable to govern all of their land after they conquered it from various regions. Once an opposing force came in to reconquer the land there was nothing they could do about it. The romans lost all of their land as easily as they had conquered it.
The roman empire fell, however others believe that it did not fall but actually just became something else. There were many small things that went wrong with the roman empire from political insecurities to lack of an army to defend its territory the roman empire was easily re taken from the people who had lost their land and the empire itself simply fell.
Works cited in APA Format
Decline of the Roman Empire." Wikipedia, the Free Encyclopedia. Apr.-May 2011. Web. 12 Apr. 2011. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Decline_of_the_Roman_Empire>.
Gill, N.s. "Fall of Rome - Why Did Rome Fall." Ancient / Classical History - Ancient Greece & Rome & Classics Research Guide. Web. 12 Apr. 2011. <http://ancienthistory.about.com/cs/romefallarticles/a/fallofrome.htm>.
Squires, Nick. "What Led to the Fall of the Roman Empire? - Telegraph." Telegraph.co.uk - Telegraph Online, Daily Telegraph and Sunday Telegraph - Telegraph. Apr.-May 2011. Web. 12 Apr. 2011. <http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/worldnews/europe/italy/8438599/What-led-to-the-fall-of-the-Roman-Empire.html>.
Sam,
ReplyDeleteYour essay is good but here are a few pointers...
-maybe add more body to your paragraphs to explain things better.
-in your quote explanations there should be four sentences not two.
-you mostly talked about the general stuff maybe you could be more in-depth with your writing.
-your thesis statement isn't much of a thesis statement, maybe revise...
-your thesis statement and your opposing argument are supposed to be two different sentences.
Other than these your essay was good and very straight forward,good job!
Sam-
ReplyDeleteI this is a nice rough draft. Before you hand in your final draft, make sure to fix spelling/grammar and add an introductory sentence to each body paragraph. Rethink your thesis statement, it's needs to be a little more formal. Revise the analysis of each quote, there could be so more information added!
-Amanda
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ReplyDelete"Another commonly debate theory, however, is that the roman empire did not fall but just transformed into something else." -- This is not a thesis statement. Your thesis statement must state your opinion. Which do you believe: Did Rome "decline and fall" or did it "evolve" into something else?
ReplyDeletePlease follow the directions and write the opposite argument in a different color after your thesis statement in the rough draft. This practice of always making sure there is an opposite opinion will ensure that you are in fact writing thesis statements.