The roman empire was one of if not the greatest empire of all time. It had conquered almost all of the know world back during its time. However soon the empire started to do very badly. The Roman empire experienced many political and military problems which resulted in the fall of the Roman Empire. The roman empire evolved from its disaster into a new different type of empire during the end of its time.
The great Roman empire had slowly started to decline. "This slow decline occurred over a period of approximately 320 years, culminating on September 4, 476, when Romulus Augustus, the last Emperor of the Western Roman Empire, was deposed by Odoacer, a Germanic chieftain. " (Wikipedia). This shows that the empire did slowly fall. It considers the main point of its collapse was the roman emperor Romulus Augustus was killed by a Germanic chief. This was considered the final collapsing point for the roman empire. They could never recover after that loss.
The Roman empire fell due to many different factors. "There are adherents to single factors, but more people think a combination of such factors as Christianity, decadence, lead, monetary trouble, and military problems caused the Fall of Rome" (Gill, N.S.). This means that the empire fell due to a lot of small things put together. Such small problems such as these together completely undermined the Roman Empire. Especially their military problems since they could no longer defend themselves. There was no way they could defend all of their territories when they had little military power and whatever they conquered just got retaken over.
The main reason the Roman Empire fell were, "military overreach, invasion by emboldened tribes of Huns and Visigoths from northern and central Europe, inflation, corruption and political incompetence." (Squires, Nick). This explains how another contributing factor to the fall was political incompetence. The romans were unable to govern all of their land after they conquered it from various regions. Once an opposing force came in to reconquer the land there was nothing they could do about it. The romans lost all of their land as easily as they had conquered it.
The Roman empire experienced many political and military problems which resulted in the fall of the Roman Empire. There were many small things that went wrong with the roman empire from political insecurities, lack of wealth, there were many wars going on within the empire, and corruption amongst their leaders. The Roman empire declined and fell, transforming from one of the most large and strongest empires to one of the weakest.
Works cited in APA Format
Decline of the Roman Empire." Wikipedia, the Free Encyclopedia. Apr.-May 2011. Web. 12 Apr. 2011. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Decline_of_the_Roman_Empire>.
Gill, N.s. "Fall of Rome - Why Did Rome Fall." Ancient / Classical History - Ancient Greece & Rome & Classics Research Guide. Web. 12 Apr. 2011. <http://ancienthistory.about.com/cs/romefallarticles/a/fallofrome.htm>.
Squires, Nick. "What Led to the Fall of the Roman Empire? - Telegraph." Telegraph.co.uk - Telegraph Online, Daily Telegraph and Sunday Telegraph - Telegraph. Apr.-May 2011. Web. 12 Apr. 2011. <http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/worldnews/europe/italy/8438599/What-led-to-the-fall-of-the-Roman-Empire.html>.
You really get going with the paragraph that starts: "The Roman empire fell due to many different factors." That's what you should be focused on from the very beginning.
ReplyDeleteCut everything from your intro paragraph except the thesis statement. Then flip the second and third paragraphs. This seems to be a more logical structure for your argument. What you are arguing is fine, it's "how" you are arguing it that needs work.
Think of it like this: Every single thing you write in your body paragraphs should be for the express purpose of supporting your argument.